joeys question?

I think the main character in my book, Chuck Palahniuk, has not shown self improvement. Throughout the chapters he continuously thrown himself into loathsome situations. First, he attends a weird sex festival in Missoula, Montana, in which he watches rednecked folk have bizarre sex with each other on stage. As he watches this grotesque display of debauchery madness he writes down all that goes on around him. Some would say he was writing down his most favorite parts of the festival! Everyone knows the only reason he knows the price of the the dildos and disposable cameras at the festival were because he had to pay for them himself! What do you have to say about that? Well, I'll tell what I have to say! This so called "author" is more of horny jackass if I do say so myself! But, lets move on.

The dog, the dog, he's at it again! Chuck Palahniuk dressed as a lovable dog in the mall. How cute, right? Wrong. Chuck Palahniuk the loathsome man of Missoula is back in action and he's here at this mall to kidnap children and sell them on ebay. A middle aged woman had the right idea when she shouted, "Everyone get back! Get Back! For all we know they could be strapped with bombs inside those costumes...". Though she didn't hit in on the money, she was on the right track. These so called "men" are the scum of the united states malls. Trafficking children to be thrown into illegal child clown rings for the pleasure of young adults. Shocking.